200分！如何写好英语求职信？

Question

请指教！
下面是我的英语求职信，但感觉没什么新意，也存在一些表达或者语法上的错误，请帮我在这些方面作一点修改或者给点相关的意见！
谢谢了！
如果能够给出一些有新意或者经典的句子就更好了！

请指点：
Dear sir or madam:

Thanks for reading my resume.

I have graduated from XX University in June 2006 and I am interested and confident in the position you offered.

Firstly, I am a hard-working student and I am always eager to learn more. Although I was not good at English at the beginning，I worked harder than most of the other students for I found learning English was quite an enjoyable thing and most importantly, I didn"t want to fall behind. I gain what I"ve paid finally and became one of the top students in my department. I am ready to learn more which inspires me to go further.

Secondly, when I was learning in the college I mastered the skills of the translation as well as interpretation. Meanwhile, I obtained the postive judgement from my teachers and classmates and certificates of the TEM-4 through hard-working. I hold that the more I love English the more I enjoy it. So I often appear at the English corner where I could communicate with foreigners and friends to my heart’s content.

Thirdly, I participated in various kinds of social work actively. I still could recall some wonderful experiences clearly like being the volunteer in ‘The Committee of Caring Next Generation’ and an interpreter in the ‘2005Volkswagen Pro Tour Grand Finals’. I always try my best to achieve the assignment offered by authority and never forget to share my ideas with my partner. So it’s always the biggest surprise that I got more friends after taking part in the activities. And I really appreciate it.

Fourthly, my feature is optimistic and desirous to communicate with others. Furthermore, my classmates said I am a responsible and trustworthy boy when I was doing my duties in the college position. Not only was I accumulated a lot of experience from my job but also the team spirit. And I am willing to accept innovative ideas and share my personal opinions.

Finally, I love basketball and I’d like to challenge myself in the playground just like in the daily life. I got perfect body through exercise so I can bear going on business frequently.

Give me a chance I will show you my competency and trust me I won’t let you down.

Best wishes!
补充说明一下：复制来的答案我看就免了！我只想请有心的人帮我看看，针对我的提问给我些指点和意见！谢谢合作！

Answer 1

写英语求职信,最重要的是你要熟悉求职信和英国人或者美国人的写信思路,不要将中文版的翻译成英语,那样会让人觉得你的英语还不怎么地道,从而失去竞争力.
首先是正确的称呼,如Dear Sir/Mdam就可以啦!
然后就是你写信的目的,因为外国人是特别注重效率的,比如I would like to be considered as an applicant for the XX posotion listed in today`s Dallas Tribune.
这之后就是自己的一些资料,当然都是和所求职业有关的,比如年龄,学历,以及所学的一些重要课程,需要解释的是,学历并不能说明课程,毕竟不同国家,不同学校所开设的课程不同.
然后,写一些自己的课外实践内容,当然也要和职业有点关系,以及自己的一些收获,心得,以此来说明你比其他人更有竞争力.
最后就是结尾,注意一定要留下联系方式,如:I would like to come to for an interview at your convenience.My telephone number is *******.I look forward to hearing from you.
以下是我都修改意见:
1.Thanks for reading my resume. 可以删去
2.你所罗列的五点只是求职信的一部分,有必要压缩,另外有很多语法错误,可能是你对英语的复杂句不是很了解,其实也不是只有长句才能体现文采,恰当的用词也是不可缺少的一部分.
3.五点之间有交叉,你的思路还不是很好,可以先简单地写下,然后在合并相同点,长短句结合,注意连词的运用,恰当的话会比较上口.
4.Give me a chance I will show you my competency and trust me I won’t let you down 要换掉,应该说你愿意参加面试,表示很诚恳的样子.
5.结尾用Sincerely yours
以上就是我的意见,我也好久没有写英语文章啦,所以只能发现简单的语法错误,也就没有详细说明啦,抱歉哈!

Answer 2

最好写自己的长处

Answer 3

求职信分为推荐信和自荐信两种，它是书面表达的重要体裁之一，也是高考书面表达的热点内容。写求职信可按下列七个步骤进行。下面举例说明：

假设你叫李平，你从报上得知某公司欲招聘一名英语翻译，请你给该公司经理写一份求职信，你的个人资料如下：
1.简况：姓名，李平；年龄，30岁；身高，1.80米；健康状况，良好；业余爱好，游泳、唱歌、跳舞。
2.简历：1994年北京大学毕业后分配到南通中学工作，1996年调至苏州中学工作至今。�
3.工作：工作认真负责，与人相处融洽。
4.特长：精通英语，尤其口语，已将多本中文书籍译成英语，懂一些日语、能用日语与外宾对话。
联系电话：3654731�
联系地址：苏州市人民路一号

第一步：介绍消息来源
介绍消息来源实际上是求职信的开篇交待句，它可使求职信显得自然、顺畅；而不介绍消息来源，会使收信人感到意外、突然，文章也缺乏过渡、照应，本文消息来源可作如下介绍：

Dear manager,
I learned from the newspaper that your company wanted to hire an English translator.

第二步：表明求职心愿�
介绍完消息来源后，应向收信人表明自己的求职心愿，即写信的目的，本文求职心愿可作如下介绍：
I'm interested in this job very much. I'd like to get this job.

第三步：介绍个人简历
某单位需要新人，求职人也有求职心愿，但这并不意味着这项工作非你莫属。如果你没有干好这项工作的经历、实力，也是难以适应的。因此，介绍个人简历是必不可少的。本文个人简历可介绍如下：
Now I'd like to introduce myself to you. My name is Li Ping. I'm 30 years old. I'm 180 cm tall. I'm healthy. I like swimming, singing and dancing in my spare time. I graduated from Beijing University in 1994.then,I went to work in Nantong Middle School.In 1996，I began to work in Suzhou Middle School and I have worked there until now.

第四步：摆出求职优势
仅有一定的工作经历而没有自身的优势和特长，也很难求得称心如意的工作。因此，求职时应表明自己除了具有一定的工作经历之外，还具有一定的优势和特长，这样才能稳操胜券。本文可通过如下方法摆出自己的优势：
I work hard and I can get along well with others. I'm good at English and especially my spoken English is very good. I've translated many Chinese books into English. I can understand Japanese and I can talk to foreigners in Japanese freely.

第五步：提出获职打算
丰富的工作经验，一定的优势和特长，只能代表过去和现在的情况，如果获职后自以为心愿已了，从此高枕无忧，马虎从事，那也是得不到用人单位认可的。显然表明获职后努力工作的决心是感动用人单位的领导从而顺利谋得此项工作的重要一环。本文获职打算可作如下介绍：�
If you aGREe with me, I'll work hard and try to be a good translator.

第六步：请求答复联系
如果单位领导同意了你的求职要求，你必然要请他和你联系，以便你及时做好准备，到用人单位应聘或报到。为准确起见，请求答复联系时你还应当提供你的通讯地址、邮政编码、电话号码、电子信箱等。本文答复联系的内容可作如下介绍：
If you aGREe with me, please write a letter to me or phone me. I live at No.1 Renmin Road,Suzhou city. My telephone number is 3654371.

第七步：表明感激之情
无论你的请求是否能够得到满意的答复，你给用人单位写信就是给对方添了麻烦，因此你应向对方表明感激之情。本文可这样来表明感激之情：
Thank you very much.
上述七步内容联成一个整体，再加上下面的信尾，就成为一封完整的求职信。�
Yours Truly
LiPing

实战训练：
假如你是王林，李明是你的好友，他对Brown先生的公司(firm)感兴趣，打算到该公司谋职(apply for a position)。请根据下面李明的简历表，用英语写一封推荐信，词数120左右。

姓 名 李明
性 别 男
国 籍 中国
出生地 山东济南
婚否 已婚
出生日期 1968.5.1
通讯地址 济南市人民路148号
电话 6600537
教育程度 大学
职业 律师
外语水平 擅长英语、懂些日语
其 他 有三年工作经验，办事认真，待人诚恳，与人相处和睦

Dear Mr.Brown,
My friend-Li Ming wants to apply for a position with your firm. Now, I'd like to introduce my friend to you. Li Ping graduated from a college three years ago and since then he has worked as a lawyer. He is good at English and knows some Japanese. He works hard and is careful in everything he does. He is honest, kind and easy to get on with. He was born on May 1,1968 in Jinan, Shandong Province,China. He is married and lives at No.148 Renmin Road,Jinan city.He shows GREat interest in your firm. If he is accepted, he will do his best. I'm sure he will be fit for the position. If you aGREe with him, please write a letter to him, his telephone number is 6600537.
Yours truly

Answer 4

开头务必将所学专业点出来。

Answer 5

用百度搜啊

Answer 6

我觉得写得不错